it's a fine line

[simplyn2deep]

there's writing with detail, and then there's using just too many damn words, to write "he took some scissor out of his desk and cut open a box". I mean, that doesn't sound pretty, but it's right to the point.

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[rocsfan.livejournal.com]

Point! Scissors! Haha!

People always use too many words! If I were editing this, I would change it to "He cut the box open with scissors." It would depend on ths context, of course, and whether the desk was important.

[simplyn2deep.livejournal.com]

haha I didn't even realize that.

well it was mentioned that the box was placed on the desk, so I guess saying that the scissors came from the desk is redundant lol

[rocsfan.livejournal.com]

Hope I didn't overstep. When I get into editing mode, I can be exacting! :\

[simplyn2deep.livejournal.com]

oh no. I was just saying that a lot of words weren't necessary to describe a simple task.